Search our blogs!

Sunday, July 18, 2010

Amy"s Feedback on Derek's Ari Gold, IS THE MAN

I think you did a good job relating typical masculine traits, like aggression and leadership roles, to the traits that are being expressed in Ari. Also I think your point about Ari’s oppression of women enforcing typical patriarchy was a good point There were some errors with grammar. Some of the sentences seemed a bit awkward and confusing. Also when you tried to integrate the quotes from the episode, it got confusing. Maybe if you directly quoted it from the episode instead of trying to get the idea of what he was actually saying it would make your point clearer. - Amy :)

No comments: