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Monday, July 19, 2010

Henry's critique of Hannah's First Blog Post


Interesting argument that is backed up with examples from the show and quotes from the text.

I like the idea of "blurring" the line between hetero and homo sexual characteristics. It was a neat idea.

It was a good piece to describe feminine and masculine qualities of Barney's character.


A few grammatical errors, nothing too major though (I'm a little picky). I don't think you need a comma to end your quotes. It would be "... end" (...). [period] or something like that.

Better transitions may be used for the flow of the paper. "However" is a particular one that you like to use. Maybe you can combine paragraphs with like ideas.

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