“Women for Sale in the Media Meat Market”

Juliana
Nice job on:
1. Your pictures do a good job of standing in for the body of the paper.
2. I like the way you focused your paper on the comparison of the media to a "meat market".

Areas for improvement:
1. I might have drawn the reader's attention to specific pictures in the collage to reiterate how they reflect your thesis.
2. You may have been able to use more of your own words than Jhally's in paragraph 2, because most of this paragraph is solely centered around his beliefs with minimal input of your own.