Nice job on:
1. Good use of specific examples from the show to drive home your analysis.
2. I liked the quote by Whitehead you chose to end your paper with and it was effective in summing up your argument.
Areas for improvement:
1. A clearer thesis may have strengthened your introduction.
2. An outline of what would be included in the body of the paragraphs would have let the reader know what to expect from the rest of the paper.
Saturday, May 31, 2008