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Saturday, May 31, 2008

Blog Post #2-- What's Cheaper? WOMEN OR BEER?!?

Name of author - Lisa

Nice job on:
1. The collage is great. The pictures work really well in supporting your thesis.
2. Your analysis on cologne advertisements and the degradation of women is very well written and evaluated.

Areas for potential improvement:
1. The quotes you used are very good but I think if you use only one quote in each paragraph it will help to focus your arguments a little better.
2. There are one or two minor grammatical errors but they do not take away from the comprehension of the writing or analysis.

Erin J

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