Lauren's Feedback on Brendan's Blog: Being a Man Down the Shore

Brendan-
Strengths:
You did a very nice job showing that although the men on The Jersey Shore do display masculine characteristics, they go about achieving this portrayal through feminine methods.
I liked the steroids example and how you showed that masculinity in this case is defined through physical appearance, making something as bad and harmful as steroids seem like a positive thing.

Could Use Improvement:
It would have been interesting if you gave examples for exactly how these methods attract the opposite sex, being that these men clearly take very feminine measures to create their images.  Also, comparing the amount of time the men on the show take, in comparison to the women, in 'beautifying' themselves would have been interesting to examine.

Overall, great job!
-Lauren