I really liked how you kept referencing the ads in your paragraphs. As a reader it makes it a lot clearer the points you are trying to make when I have these other images that I can fall back on, and is something I wish I did more of in mine. Also, I really liked the ads you chose. I know for what you were trying to prove, there were probably plenty ads to pick from, but the ones you did select really highlight the point you are trying to get across in your body, and I feel I can just look at your collage and get a good idea of what the rest of the paper will be about.
In terms of things to improve, as much as I liked your collage I would have liked to have seen more of the sports examples you were talking about in your third paragraph. Also, this is not really something I thought could be improved but just a point that came up when reading; I know in class the discussion came about regarding examples of masculine ads that are underlyingly (totally made up that word) violent. So couldn't some of the ads featuring sports players be looked at as so, since they serve as this powerful, dominating figure in the ad?