Jon, you guys did a really great job revising this video. I'm glad you kept the same song. The message you were sending about how images in the media cause girls to go to drastic lengths to achieve an "ideal" appearance was very clear. I'm also glad that you chose to still incorporate the choreography because it makes the video fun! The use of text was really helpful as you shifted from one topic to the next. Just a couple of minor things I would suggest that may be improved: Some of the images at the end when you were showing "real" California girls were a little confusing, such as the pictures of Barack Obama, Sarah Palin. Also your works cited went by a little fast, and I liked the cool effect you had in your last video. Overall, this was a huge improvement. Good job.